Tonokawa was a new emerging scenerio writer around the time LitBus was being created, making LitBus his first official debut. It’s reasonable as to why people would criticize him, since he is new, and not as experienced.
Then we have Rewrite, which would also be reasonable as to why he was criticized, since he might have not been used to writing the “Rewrite” storylines, since Rewrite is different from past Key works.
Tonokawa is a great scenerio writer. Just wait until his official debut at Key, leading a story. Hopefully they release a new VN or anime-original 3… Tomoyo After & LitBus & Harmonia’s official translations & Rewrites anime is all great, but I’m ready for a new Key story, that hopefully Kai, Jun, or even Tonokawa can lead and make. Maybe I’m just craving for new Hinoue & Na-Ga art (pretending if Harmonia was already out).